高中英语新高考-英语作文:跟着名师学写作(含逐句点评解析)

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高中英语新高考-英语作文：跟着名师学写作（含逐句点评解析）

虽然我有太多的话题想说，但是每周能抽时间写成的只有两三篇。本期的话题是基于一直以

来有人问我如何学习，却迟迟不肯付出行动。我想说的是，方法其实不重要，重要的是行动。

知识的积累无非就是多读，多练，无它。所谓大道至简。

昨天的时间稍微充足一点，所以，这篇我加上了批注。自己给自己写的文章加评注和分析，

也不是多见的吧，似乎有点高调了。不管怎么说，但愿对您有点用。

Action and Meaning

How do I make my study plan? What is the point of my decision if the result seems carved in

stone?...

评析：开头用疑问句用来设置悬念，也是点名主旨。这也是议论文的一种行文常规手段。

What’s the point of doing…，用来询问做某事的意义何在。Be carved in stone，英文解释：If a

suggestion, plan, rule, etc. is carved in stone, it cannot be changed。一般否定句更常用，用来表

明并非一成不变。

I was asked these questions recently by one of my students. He could recite many so-called

golden rules in English learning but feared his effort would be in vain if he made an insensible

decision or the action would get him nowhere because no pay-off was in sight temporarily. He

told me that he felt overwhelmed and demotivated, unable to make even small decisions.

评析：具体说明上段疑问句产生的背景。这位同学患得患失，既想做出计划，又担心计划没

有意义，从而始终不敢去行动，或者浅尝辄止。

Golden rule, 英文解释：a very important principle, way of behaving etc that should be

remembered。当然，这里也可以用recipe，secret等词。in vain徒劳的；get sb nowhere让

某人一无所获；pay-off回报，比benefit更容易理解；overwhelmed必知所措的；demotivated

消极的，失去动力的。这两个词连用，用来突出茫然的状态，当然也可以选用at a loss，我

本来使用have not the slightest idea of…，但是为了简洁，就弃用了。

For a few seconds it stumped me, mainly because I’ve never viewed English learning as a

collection for aha moments. It’s a continuum, a lifelong awakening to the diversity of foreign

cultures. But it is not the case with the poor boy. His patience was almost exhuasted. The more

time spent in validating his ideas or plans, the more doubts aroused about the meaning.

评析：此段承接上段，从我对英语学习的感受谈到这个学生的困境的具体情况，为下段深入

剖析原因做伏笔。

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stump: to be unable to answer a question or solve a problem because it is too difficult。我本来

用corner，但stump这个词是专门针对无法回答别人的问题，更准确。Aha moments顿悟时

刻；a lifelong 对……的终身的领悟（这个词块是我借用的，表示对知识的如饥

似渴地接收）；it is not the 某人情况并非如此；validate证实……的有效。

The root of the problems lies in the indecision caused by too many choices. The more choices

we’re given, the less able we are to make a decision. Our indecision in turn pushes us to justify

the next move -- to figure out where the meaning is directed. We worry about doing the wrong

thing and obsess over inconsequential details. And sadly, we end up squandering the most

important moments of our lives. Just as Yang Jiang, a well-known writer, put in her response to a

young bewildered reader, all his problems can be summrized as thinking too much and reading

too little. Similarly, the boy’s problem is lack of strong and swift action, which is the stepping

stone to a more aware, thoughtful existence. Actually, there is no known formula to success. The

most efficient way is always the simplest one.

评析：本段剖析了犹豫不决的两个主要原因：选择太多导致无所适从；患得患失导致在次要

细节上浪费时间。最后得出结论：大道至简。获取的知识的途径并不重要，关键是快速行动

起来。

the root of ...问题的根源；indecision犹豫不决；justify证明……是合理的，这个词是议论文中

常用词，可以替换the reason for; squander浪费；bewildered困惑的；strong and swift action

坚决和快速的行动，本来我用的是action with strong belief and fast speed，这样修改后，就

简洁有力了,并且strong和swift形成头韵的修辞效果；stepping stone垫脚石，这里是比喻；

formula途径，实际上这个词和recipe等是同义的。

Life is a journey, not a business plan. Where we’re going doesn’t matter as much as we think

it does. More often than not, we just need to move in a direction without any regret instead of

hesitating about gains or loss. As we build momentum, we can learn to steer. This is the way life

works. Just as with riding a bike, we can steer more easily the faster we're going. And conversely,

if we're not moving and we try to steer, we'll probably fall down. Isn't it interesting that failure is

what happens not when we move too quickly, but too slowly? Most of us are trying carefully to

plan the future. However, the opposite is true. The impediment to beginning our life is the belief

that we can control our future. What we can do is participate in it.

评析：此段是上一段段意的延伸，说明行动的重要性：行动而非计划导致成功，因为未来不

可预测，且行且珍惜，并且通过比喻来诠释。（本段的比喻也是借用名家手笔下的文字，读

者可以积累）

As we build momentum, we can learn to steer.一旦势头有了，你就能学着操控全局。

momentum动力，势头；steer指导，操纵，下面的steer意为“驾驶，操纵方向”；conversely

相反地；the opposite is true事实恰好相反，和the other way around同义；impediment障碍。

Meaning can only be found on the way to the destination rather than in making the plan. On

the journey, we can not only find more worthy of pursuit, but also experience a sense of

fulfillment in solving new problems. Take writing for example. Many of us focus on reading and

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